Page 1 of Long time lurker - finally posting for opinions on my current project...?

I`ve been a member of DVD Reviewer for about 5 years now, and apart from the odd post here and there, I am generally what I think is termed as a `lurker` - I visit regularly to enjoy reading everyones posts, opinions etc, but rarely contribute myself.

So, after all this time, I`m wanting to get everyone`s opinion on a little project I`ve had simmering for a while. I am a designer by trade, and dabble in writing stories - screenplays to be specific. I figured, where better to get peoples opinion about a screenplay than a site dedicated to movies? The problem with the written word is that you have to read it to get a good feel for the story. So, to allow people to get the `flavour` of my ideas, I decided to produce what is essentially a mini website that gives a small taster as to the nature of the screenplay.

So, I invite you all to please take a look at the mini-site for my screenplay called `Sentient`. Please have a poke around - the site contains a short trailer, some concept imagery, and a synopsys of the stroy, and let me know what you think? Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. For ovbious reasons I haven`t included the screnplay itself on the site, but the site contents should hopefully give you an idea of where the story is going. Please note, the site requires Flash Player 8 to be installed, otherwise you will miss a lot of visual content if viewed with a previous version of Flash. The site is about 5MB in size (due to it`s highly visual nature), so takes about 20 seconds to load on a 2MBit connection.

Site link: http://www.jamiemartinart.co.uk/sentient_index.html

Here`s some poster artwork:



I look forward to hearing back from you all!

Jamie :)

This item was edited on Monday, 14th August 2006, 19:38

I`m a great believer in concept over usability and any site that steers well clear of Jakob Nielsen and his bloody rules is ok by me! So in that respect, I really liked the design.

The synopsis, I`m not too sure of. Not enough detail to get me interested. Is the main protaganist a private detective or a police detective? How did you research the russian element of the story? what do you mean by underground war? and how does that effect the world? I think you need to eloborate a little to add a little interest to the story. It all seems very one dimensional and em.. how does a detective have a pioneering nueroligist as a side kick?

:o :o :o :o
An astonishingly professional site! :o
Have you really put that together for your story? Flash, music, effects etc.? :o
In the trailer, when it cuts to movie footage, what is that? Not stuff you`ve shot?..?

Obviously, can`t say too much about the `story` `cos it`s not there but if you put as much effort into the story and it`s as creative as the site, it could be gooood.. or could be all style, no substance.. more info needed...

Ste

This item was edited on Monday, 14th August 2006, 20:01

WOW :o :o :o

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Well, the site is fantastic, a hell of a lot better than most movie `sites` out there. The story is intruiging, but I`m a little comfused about the trailer. Has the screenplay been shot? or is it just a mix of flash shots from other movies? (Thought i saw some Entrapment and Ronin shots in there)

Oh, and here`s the poster as your link doesn`t seem to be working



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My eyes, My beautiful eyes....


My Collection
Writer`s Release

This item was edited on Monday, 14th August 2006, 20:36

Just as well you detailed your history here or I`d be screaming "Viral Marketing!" about now. If the screenplay`s half as good as the website I`ll be well impressed. As it is it already looks like a fantastic trailer for an XBOX game or similar - you don`t fancy taking it down that line?

Look forward to seeing more of it in future - good luck.

:o Amazing work!

Gobsmacked! :o

Show off! ;)

I`m with Gareth on this one ^